Here’s my feedback on Flyer #1:
(I can review the LGBTQI flyer sometime this week.)

General comment:
I’m not sure the bullets are the most visually appealing option. We might be better  just having these points indented like they are now but without bullets.

Text:
Reinvesting [We can't “reinvest” a budget but we can “reinvest” funds.] our bloated military budget on domestic needs, stop drone bombing, and close most foreign military bases
["Re-prioritize our budget away from bloated military spending towards domestic needs; stop drone bombing, and close most foreign military bases"]

Ending the failed War on Drugs; treat abuse as health issue
["Ending the failed War on Drugs; treat addiction as a health issue"]

Ending warrantless spying on US residents [What does the law currently say? I’m not sure, but I believe only US citizens are supposed to be off-limits for domestic spying. Would stating this as “US residents” mean a change from the current practice (or law)?]

Publicly financed, fair, and democratic elections, including ranked choice voting and proportional representation
[I’d like to see something like "hand-counting all paper ballots in front of public observers” or other election integrity measures, but this might require group discussion/approval. However, “fair and democratic” does imply some election integrity measures.]


Free public education at all levels; write off student debt

A Universal Basic Income, and Living Wage jobs
["Universal Basic Income, Federal Job Guarantee, and Living Wage jobs"]

Universal Basic Income and the Federal Job Guarantee are policies prescribed by Modern Monetary proponents. Is there a reason UBI is included here but the Job Guarantee isn’t?


On May 14, 2017, at 6:49 PM, John-Marc Chandonia <jmc@sfgreens.org> wrote:

I followed up by drafting the new 4x6" postcards I'd
suggested earlier:
http://sfgreens.org/new_flyers.pdf

Please give me any corrections or suggestions for
improvement.

I will bring printed copies to this week's CC
meeting so we can work on them some more there.

JMC
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